One Night Out in the Pub

The music rolled off the keys
like a particularly satisfying swear word off the tongue.
No breath necessary.
Confusion of styles
wove light and night in warp and woof,
while tweeters and woofers washed their mouths with soap
just to get to the next chorus.
The music of the spheres
had a whole new rhythm section
there.
My own voice betrayed me.
My own ear mislaid the chords
and made my lyric the grab-bag for miscreants
to the tune of everything I had.
It put the pub in public.

I’ll give up my seat
on this world’s barstool
and let some other prophet
buy the next round.

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13 Comments on “One Night Out in the Pub”


  1. Great post today. I really enjoyed reading it very much. You have an excellent blog here. Thanks again for sharing.

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  2. kjpgarcia Says:

    “I’ll give up my seat
    on this world’s barstool
    and let some other prophet
    buy the next round.”

    This is wonderful last stanza to a good poem.


  3. I hope you never give up your seat – your insights are invaluable!!!


  4. Thank you. There is some divided opinion on that question, of course…

  5. dantrewear Says:

    Hi Carroll. This is truly excellent, some very innovative ideas & words…
    “The music rolled off the keys / like a particularly satisfying swear word off the tongue” – a stunning start, continuing all the way to the final stanza.
    I suspect you will get too many positive comments about this one to hide your talents… best –D


    • Thank you Dan. My daughter Roseanna, who is 18, and I have a poetry “competition” where we take turns coming up with a first line and each writing a poem coming from it. The first two lines were actually her suggestion one week. I think she hasn’t finished her poem from them. I’ve posted two other poems that started by her suggestion.


  6. Which poems come from Roseanna’s suggestions? It is a wonderful idea! I am glad the poetic talent continues to the next generation. Vivian


    • Lampshade and Cynicism lol were all started by her. She is a good writer and is now majoring in creative writing, a freshman at the local state university. I am trying to talk her in to posting her stuff on a website of her own but she doesn’t need anymore uses of time. If she won’t do it, maybe I’ll put some of her poems on here…


  7. “The music rolled off the keys
    like a particularly satisfying swear word off the tongue.”

    Not how I would describe music, so I’m glad to come across your poem. I like it when writers can make their readers see things differently with unlikely comparisons that somehow work. 🙂


  8. Thank you for your comment. I am glad that line works. Perhaps you are familiar with the Bruce Cockburn song “Maybe the Poet” that has the lines “Maybe you and he will not agree/ but you need him to show you the ways to see”? Anyway, thanks for the encouragement.


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